Fight for the Right...

I know I am supposed to start this letter with why I feel the essay I chose is a “good” essay, however, in my opinion it falls short of being considered anything of the sort. I read “Fight for the Right to Save a Life” by Rebecca Schmidt, regarding the screening process for donating blood. She specifically focuses on the fact that homosexual men, who have at some point in their life been sexually active, are banned from contributing to the program. Initially, with the language she used, and the statistics she had found to back up her information, I was confident that she felt passionate about eliminating this outdated regulation. As I delved deeper into the reading, I noticed that once she made a strong compelling argument, she used contradictory words such as “but” and “however” to change her position and emphasize that of the opposing side. This, along with paragraphs upon paragraphs of useless information, made her essay impossible for me to read. In my opinion, a "good" essay clearly states and supports the thesis throughout its entirety, as opposed to dwelling on the fence of two extremes.